I quite like what you've done with the opening! IMAGERY! YES! You also used the word "spelunking," which is one of my most favorite words.
Also, I'm glad the Sea Devils aren't mugging people this time. They're considerably more Sea Devilish.
So much for looking like the wall. Must be the blinding whiteness of her dress.
Ahahahhaa, that wasn't there before! I laughed.
All in all, I still love this whole thing. And I'm inwardly pleased you took my suggestion for the title.
No, I suppose 40 Page Monster won't exactly equal the total page number of all the stuff you've sent me, but really, it's both the size and--more importantly--the traumatizing content that will be the elements with which I execute my glorious revenge upon you. <3
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Date: 2011-08-24 01:15 am (UTC)Also, I'm glad the Sea Devils aren't mugging people this time. They're considerably more Sea Devilish.
So much for looking like the wall. Must be the blinding whiteness of her dress.
Ahahahhaa, that wasn't there before! I laughed.
All in all, I still love this whole thing. And I'm inwardly pleased you took my suggestion for the title.
No, I suppose 40 Page Monster won't exactly equal the total page number of all the stuff you've sent me, but really, it's both the size and--more importantly--the traumatizing content that will be the elements with which I execute my glorious revenge upon you. <3